Use this checklist to analyze Professor Gelernter: · What is the claim? · What support does the writer offer for the claim? · How does the writer appeal to readers? · How evenhandedly does the writer present the argument? · Can you tell the writer’s stance or attitude toward the subject and audience? · What words convey that attitude? · Is the attitude consistent throughout? · How well does the text meet the needs and expectations of the audience? · Is the tone appropriate for the topic? Why or why not? · Does the writer use any logical fallacies? Assuming the qualities of some adolescents under 21 define the entire group. Some of you noted this in your first-draft remarks. · What authorities or other sources of outside information does the writer use? · Does the editorial have a clear pattern of organization? Could anything be cut, added, or changed? · How does the writer address you as the reader? · Is the ending satisfying? · What did it leave you thinking? (adapted from Bullock, et al. 118-19) ___________________________ What is the main point your analysis is trying to make? Read your draft from beginning to end as an interested reader, trying to understand the information and ideas from a fresh perspective. Title · What did you think when you reviewed your title? · Is it interesting? Is it informative? Is it appropriate? · Will it attract other readers’ attention? Thesis and Introduction · Is there a clearly defined thesis in your analysis? · What is it? · Does the rest of your analysis adequately demonstrate your main point? Support and Elaboration in the Body Paragraphs · Is there sufficient support for the thesis? · Is there anywhere you would like to have more detail? · Does your response have a clear pattern of organization? · Could anything be cut? Should anything be added or changed? Audience · Can you tell your stance or attitude toward the subject and audience? · What words convey your attitude? · Is the attitude consistent throughout? · How well does the text meet the needs and expectations of the audience? · Is your tone appropriate for the topic? Why or why not? [I thought more of you would be angry.] Mechanics  · Are the sentences complete and grammatical? · Are the transitions helpful or do transitions need to be added? · Is the punctuation correct? · Can any words or phrases be sharpened? · Are the verbs mostly active and present tense? (Examples: Gelernter claims, notes, complains, says, explains) · Are all words spelled correctly? Conclusion · Is the ending of your analysis satisfying? · What did it leave you thinking? · How else could the piece have ended? · Is there a clear thesis in your conclusion that does not repeat the introduction’s thesis? What is it?  Regarding your analysis – not Gelernter’s. He has already been edited by the editorial page editor of The Wall Street Journal. In truth, I clipped Gelernter’s editorial from the newspaper last July because I was shocked that it has passed the scrutiny of the editorial editor.